I just read the following sentence:
“He heard her own gasp of astonishment”
Some words just don’t work well with things no one else can do for you, I mean…
I entered the room and guess if I was surprised. My neighbor gasped with my astonishment, and as he had one of my thoughts, he came over to my own apartment to have a talk with me. He told me, with his wife’s voice, he disliked all but his own ideas. I had one of his ideas and in a contrary to his position, decided I liked it, so I made it my own idea.
It could get pretty interesting after a while of that. Perhaps the next pop-style of writing…?